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Title: I need your opinions on my poems for school=)
Description: About Death and War...how fun..


~Mc_Roari~ - December 14, 2007 08:25 AM (GMT)
#1~topic= death=(

It was a rainy day in November
People were here to remember
It was'nt long ago when it all went down
It was just a drive to town
People were just trying to forget about that day

It all happend that day in May
Mother and daughter and baby brother
Turning around to quiet the baby
Didnt see the Semi Truck comeing
Drunk and driving on the wrong side of the road the semi came with a BOOM

The car flew up and the baby flew out
The mom and daughter hold on for there lives as they hit the ground a roll
It burst into flames and the daughter did what she knew best
seeing her mother unconcious wanting to save her
Painfully getting her out both with broken bones and burns

The fire truck came
the abulence came, both with sirens blaring
they found the baby face down by a tree
suffering from shaken baby syndrom
they were surprised to see him still fighting for his life

They were transferred to the hospital and put in the ICU
All three would need surgery
All three would need miricales, they were fading away
Mother and daughter slipped into coma
Baby died right there
3 days later mother coded and they couldnt save her

14 and alone
Scared and tired wanting to end it all
Forced into a foster home where she was abused everyday
Slowly slipping into depression startying with cutting, and ending with a bang.
This day in November is a day to remember the family who once again is happy together.

#2~War~

You fight with everything to avoid the ways of life
Your the feelings of wanting to run away and escape it
It is the thing you just cant beat
You push and you fight
Wishing that this might all work

You hope and you dream for this fighting to stop
You try to be happy and work your way through
Life keeps pulling you back once you get close to defeting it
Over and over
You just want this to end

2 countries, 2 complications its all the same
Its a thing no one can forget
To many people get lost, to many people get broken
It doesnt matter how you put it your always in a war
Sometimes you dont even notice at all
Why cant wars just end?
It doesnt have to be this way

Caddie_Is_Love - December 15, 2007 12:11 AM (GMT)
Wow. Those are amazingly sad & depressing :(. I LOVE THEM!




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